Silverwood

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

Plot:Silverwood is the Island in which Silverveil and her pack live. Silverveil is a Fire Wolf, alpha of the Fire clan. She's well known for disipline as well as kindness. Her mate is a tempermental wolf, while her hidden admirer is a kind, brute. She has many rival clans, such as the Misty clan, plus others.Now Some will seek to destroy her, while other will step up to defend her.

As the sun broke the dark sky, Silverveil stepped from her den, the sun hitting her fire lit coat, her mate close behind. With a grunt, she moved on rosing each member of the clan. With a sigh, she came upon Dagger, her admirer. She growled, warning him to awake. As the male did, she moved on. As each member rose, she bounded off coming upon her ledge. She stepped high, a low howl escaping her, warning each and every caln to stay away. Quickly, Silverveil found her mate behind her. Sudenly, many wolves stepped from the brush, and Silverveil, as well as Nyroc, her mate, snarled. Quickly, Silverveil found each tresspasser chuckle in delight...

Comment if ya want me to go on! Pleause point ouyt anything I could improve on.

wolfgirl159357 · Joined: 07 Aug 2009 Posts: 19967

please go on

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

My breaths came uneven, more rasps then anything, as I let a low growl rip through my chest. I didn't see how we could have enemys, they were the evil ones. Quickly, somthing clicked in my mind, as I stepped forward, my mate, as always, right ahead of me at my frist step. I sighed, as I heard my name, "Hello Silverveil."- I heard from the other pack leader, the tone of the wolf polite, calm. I growled, my coat litten aflame. "What are you doing here?!"- I snarled, dismissing her politness, like she threw an insult at me. Quickly, I heard Theo snarl, I rolled my eyes. "Get out of my teritorey!"- Theo snarled at the opposing fraction. Quickly, a extended paw caught me face, sending me to my knees. I heard my mate, as well as Justin, my best friend, love of my life, and cheif commander, snarl and step forward. I opend an eye, on my feet now, to see Theo attack, as well as Justin, at the instant I fell. I grimaced at the site, as my pack followed the men's actions. The sence scared me slightly, the gore, blood, in it was hideous. Knowing I had to step up, defend my pack, I joined the battle. Quickly, my jaws locked on many's necks, ending their lives quickly. Many times, I too fell. I cried out in pain, as I felt teeth rip into my neck, and quickly I took the female enemy, and threw her, ending too her life. Once up, I looked around, the ones I loved, gone and the ones I hated with all my might, gone too. I looked back at the surviors, and found my mate was not one. Justin though, was standing, wounded, but strong. Though I didn't love my mate like he might've loved me, I raced to his side, licking him as tears streamed down my face. I looked over and counted faces I'd come to learn, 10, 20, 25 of my people, gone. I howled at the sight, as my fire buring family joined in. The remaining surviors of the war ran off, Come back here and flight like dogs I thought bitterly. But found, I was relived at their departure.That night, I slept beside the dead body of my husband, as I howled all night, wishing for ones lost, that they would somday get praise for their bravery.

I woke sudenly, the voice of Justin clear. I lifted my head drunkly. "How are you?"- I heard him whisper. I whinned. "Silverveil, you need to stand."- I heard him growl. I nodded, standing. There tears sliently fell down my cheeks...

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wolfgirl159357 · Joined: 07 Aug 2009 Posts: 19967

omg soo sad and plaese go on i love it have you read my story yet?

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

Yah, I was just going to coment. Persoanly, I don't like my storey much, but it gives me somthing to do ;D

wolfgirl159357 · Joined: 07 Aug 2009 Posts: 19967

i like it

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

Should I go on?

wolfgirl159357 · Joined: 07 Aug 2009 Posts: 19967

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

As I stood, my eyes scanned the battle sight. I sighed, the tears still there. Quietly, I looked up at Justin, his face clear. I nodded, now walking twards the den area of my pack. A low howl ripped through me. As many of my people came, I growled. My eyes began to water slightly, at the sight of many mothers, wives, and husbands morning their loved ones. "Let us have a moment of silence for the fallen."- I said, my voice breaking.

Soon after, I was on my stomache, grimicing at the thought of my lost mate. I felt the brush of fur on my right side, and I looked to see Justin. "It's ok."- I heard him whisper, his breath hot against my cold fur. I sighed, I felt even worse, when I realized what me and Justin were hiding from my lost mate.

Yet I knew, I could not change my feelings. Minutes, hours past. As I heard my clan leave, wolf by wolf, I stayed. As darkness fell, I looked back at the male by my side, he nodded. I stood, heading twards my rock, and bounding up, layed in my den waiting. When Justin came, I sighed. At the moment he layed down, I rested my head on his paws, and he in return, rested his head on mine. We lay in silence a long time, when I felt myself drift in slumber...

wolfgirl159357 · Joined: 07 Aug 2009 Posts: 19967

aww so sad that is good though

SomebodyDude · Joined: 15 Aug 2009 Posts: 4997

That is really good... very sad though... it is much better than I could do.

wolfgirl159357 · Joined: 07 Aug 2009 Posts: 19967

if you tried you could probely do good.

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

Thanks! I didnt mean for it to be sad at first, but I guess after the battle, it just happend! Very Happy

wolfgirl159357 · Joined: 07 Aug 2009 Posts: 19967

that tends to happen after deaths.

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

I had restless dreams that night, horrible, rechet ones. I knew I've been waking up every hour or so, and I knew Justin wasn't getting much sleep with me here. After a start, I'd woken up yet again. I growled at myself slowly, before pushing my eyes shut, and snuggling closer to the male.

I woke up again, this time because my friend wasn't there. My eyes grew wide, as I looked around, standing up. I jumped, when I heard his voice, "It's ok Silver honey, I'm not dead, I'm right here."- I rolled my eyes, knowing it was both sarcasem, and truth. I sighed, "Don't scare me like that."- I mumbled. "Grumpy."- I heard my favorite male snort. I couldn't help but burst into giggles. "Stop."- I said weakly to the male, before he chewed at my ear playfully. I growled, as I nipped at his paws, laughing for the first time in days. I heard Justin laugh as well, which only brought my spirts up higher. I sighed, resting my head on my paws, as I felt Justin lick my face in a grooming state. I smiled happily, as I closed my eyes for the grooming...

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