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Ok children (and adults) it's STORY TIME

 
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Do you wanna hear more?
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if you want to tell more, why not?
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impossible_eyes14



Joined: 18 May 2009
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PostPosted: Wed May 20, 2009 5:38 pm    Post subject: Ok children (and adults) it's STORY TIME Reply with quote

This is a story i just started writing... What do you think?

Prologue

The silent snow held secrets that contradicted it's calm appearance. As the silver moon lifted a cloudy veil from her face, a veil of silence was lifted from the surrounding forest; a blood-chilling scream, folowed by a savage growl. And then all was silent once again.

Chapter 1

The sun was glancing of the pure white glory of the winter morning. Akeesha woke from the odd and disturbing dream. She remebered ice, snow moonlight, and terror. She shuddered. She walked to her bathroom, still half asleep and dazed. Once she reached the warm, popurri scented bathroom, she began to run the water for her shower. As she was scrubbing, she felt a sharp pain on her arm. She gasped as she saw the cause; a long gash that went from almost her shoulder to her wrist. Though it burned horribly, and was obviously recent, she could't remember recieving it, and it was partially healed, as if it were a week or two old. She quickly finished her shower, wrapped her long, golden brown hair in a towel, and doctored her wound. After changing into her clothes for the day, a violet turtleneck and purple washed jeans, she got on her parka and started on her way to mean her boyfriend, Daemeon, at the ski slopes.


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Daisy Rabbit Mae



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PostPosted: Wed May 20, 2009 5:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

LOVE it!!! your good!!!
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impossible_eyes14



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PostPosted: Wed May 20, 2009 6:04 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Daisy Rabbit Mae wrote:
LOVE it!!! your good!!!


thanks!! my friend came up with the idea of me writing a story with characters based on real people ( sorta- i mean, hey, i gotta do a little creative additions Smile ) and then, i ran with the idea... i'l be posting a new part in a day or two. Keep an eye out Wink
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Daisy Rabbit Mae



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PostPosted: Wed May 20, 2009 6:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ok!!! Very Happy can't wait for more!!!
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lorraine



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PostPosted: Thu May 21, 2009 7:44 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

ok please understand that I am just saying this to help and so don't take this any particular way


I think you should try posting more on each chapter cause I was just getting into the story and you stopped so other than that it was good!!! Very Happy
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impossible_eyes14



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PostPosted: Fri May 22, 2009 4:02 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

lorraine wrote:
ok please understand that I am just saying this to help and so don't take this any particular way


I think you should try posting more on each chapter cause I was just getting into the story and you stopped so other than that it was good!!! Very Happy


Thanks for your comment... more will be up soon, i've just got a case of writers block...
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