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Livin' Like A Llama

 
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Cecelia



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PostPosted: Sun Jun 15, 2008 2:46 pm    Post subject: Livin' Like A Llama Reply with quote

Chapter 1 in Paisley's Perspective
I walked into the barn eagerly my loving owner was luring me and my mother inside.I was thinking "What's for supper?" After all why else would she bring me inside? I looked at my mother and hummed to ask her what was going on.She just looked at me and hummed back "I don't know dear.But Andrea would never put us in harm.Don't worry." She told me.At my mother's long explanatory hum Andrea's husband Brett came over and told my mother that it was ok.She was going to get a haircut today.A shear job from the best! Mother looked at me and sighed."What's a shear job mom?" I hummed again.Mother just looked at me and told me to go play with my best friend K.T. I gladly waltzed over and nudged my friend.She could tell from the twinkle in my eye that I wanted to play.We boinked around the barn until we were exhausted.Andrea and brett had left and our mothers told us that it was time for a nap.We drank some nice warm milk and kushed beside our mothers.We had no clue what was in store for the day.


Chapter 2 in Ivy Moon's perspective
I heard a noise coming from the outside of the barn.My guarding instincts told me to get up.I felt my daughter Paisley stir and hum in contentment.she sure was a talker.I couldn't be more proud.I got up and looked out the barn window.There was a girl that I had only met several times before.I think her name was Cecelia and her mother.They were walking toward us and my old owner Ellen was right beside them.What were they doing here?I was happy to see them but I really wanted to get up and go graze out in our pasture.My friend Cameo walked up beside me. "Is that Ellen? She hummed in excitement.I glanced her way and hummed back.I think so.The group of people came in and talked to all of us.Paisley and K.T. woke up throughout the frenzy and got up.Paisley started humming as usual."what's going on mom? Why are these strange people here?" She asked me again and again.I gave a her a stern look that said Please settle down dear.I['m trying to think.Thinking was something I did best.Thinking and listening.Everybody started hugging and kissing Paisley.I stayed away.Maybe they're picking us up for a show.I sure hope not.I thought expectantly.I hated the unknown.




More chapters will soon come.Hope you like.Comments are welcome! Smile
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Charlie1



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PostPosted: Sun Jun 15, 2008 7:13 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hmm, is this a short story? Do you plan on making it something or do you just write just to write? I believe though it might be confusing between the perspectives as I had to stop and reread one moment to understand which was which. But I think you have a good idea.
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Cecelia



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PostPosted: Tue Jun 17, 2008 9:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I've never done any stories like this before so no wonder it seemed strang to you.I might make it into something if I feel like it but this is a true story about one of the most fun days of my life told by the llamas themselves. Smile
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lorraine



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PostPosted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 5:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

in answer to charlie1 it's like a book that for chapters has someone's own thoughts and how they view the world they live in. like in regular books they have general thoughts from everyone but not specific. this would be like what they are actually thinking. Very Happy
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Charlie1



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PostPosted: Tue Aug 19, 2008 7:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yes, I know considering I have read books like that. I just said it was a bit confusing. You could also add more detail to make it better.
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lorraine



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PostPosted: Thu Aug 21, 2008 6:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

sorry if i sounded like i thought you didn't know anything! didn't mean it to sound that way but i agree sometimes it is a bit confusing Confused
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Cecelia



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PostPosted: Thu Oct 16, 2008 9:12 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I might try to change the first two chapters. They are just the rough drafts. Smile
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