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the first one! |
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the second one! |
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the third one! |
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neither! they all suck! |
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Trinity
Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 1482
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Posted: Wed Sep 26, 2007 6:33 pm Post subject: I'm Way too indecisive for my own good! |
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Okay, so I have an assignment for english where I have to write a poem. It has to be either a love poem (which I can NOT write!) or about something I really like. I have 3 that i'm trying to choose between and I was wondering if you guys would help. 2 are about rain and the other is about heavy metal music. here they are:
Gift of the sky
Delicate tears of the sky, fall on me-
Cry on me, o heaven of earth.
Let your tears embody me, let me be you-
Let me hold the cleansing holy power.
Wash away the cities, the pollution.
With your tears, take ours-let us cry no longer.
WIth your gift we will prosper,
Beneath destruction rises the phoenix again.
Fire and brimstone be banished below-
Heal our earth with warming tears,
Fight no longer fire with fire-
Fight once more our fire with water.
Blow leaves across the painful fires.
Let me once more see the night sky-
I wish to see the glowing light,
The light that has been bestowed upon stars.
Shape hearts from clouds, hand them to me
I will distribute them amongst the needy-
For the poor will never need them,
The rich will need them more often.
Once more I can hear heaven's music
Under the sky, the clear blue sky-
Remember the saving grace, the saving rain-
The gift of the sky.
The rain.
Rain
Rain,
A beauty that cannot be described,
Coming down hard or light,
It showers over me just right.
Rain,
It gently hits the roses in our field,
I truly love the rain,
It drives my insanity sane.
Rain,
Thunderstorms brighten up the dark sky with light,
It reminds me of my happiest days,
And on my bad moments, it gives me a second gaze.
Rain,
The smell, the taste, landing on my lips,
As it showers down on me,
Its drops fill each beautiful sea.
Rain,
The smell is so clean and fresh,
It soaks me when I run outside,
It?s like a fantastic ride.
Rain,
It fills me with hope and joy,
Makes all the bad moments flow from me,
And helps me, for once, run free.
Metal Magnet
Yes, I am a metal magnet
A regular head banger
Click on my lighter and hold it
To my favorite metal ballad
I love all kinds of rock and roll
From soft, medium, alternative
Nu metal and headache music
All of it rescues me from the insanity
It pops the ears of those who refuse
To acquire the taste of it
I love it! Surging my adrenaline
My blood finally pumping
Pulsing, pulsating, invigorating
Thump, thump, thump, the base screams
Like heavy footprints in the crevices within my head
Invading my dark regions of the mind
Yes, I love my metal
It caress’ the deeper aspect of me
All of a sudden I have all this energy
Head banging, screaming, lucidity gone
I love all kinds of rock and roll
From soft, medium, alternative
Nu metal and headache music
All of it rescues me from the insanity
The imagined acid trips all in my head
When the music says all it will ever say
I am at the record store preparing for the trap
Eager to play my new finds, holding the CD in my lap
Eager to rage in a positive manner
No room for me to feel diseased
For I have a natural high, a definitive rush
This headache music sets this warped mind at ease
Last edited by Trinity on Wed Sep 26, 2007 6:47 pm; edited 1 time in total |
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Cowgirls Rule
Joined: 29 Apr 2007 Posts: 10721
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Posted: Wed Sep 26, 2007 6:33 pm Post subject: |
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I like the first one |
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Trinity
Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 1482
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Posted: Wed Sep 26, 2007 8:26 pm Post subject: |
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Queso
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Posted: Wed Sep 26, 2007 8:36 pm Post subject: |
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I like the first one the best too. |
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Gold Hope Stable
Joined: 09 Dec 2006 Posts: 532
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Posted: Thu Sep 27, 2007 5:04 am Post subject: |
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i also like the first one |
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milon
Joined: 12 Feb 2007 Posts: 3649
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Posted: Thu Sep 27, 2007 6:49 pm Post subject: |
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I love the third one XD
Maybe because that was a great escape for so long, and I just like the wording and description.
Great job on all of them though, they are ALL so nicely done.
In the end, its you who has to decide what you like the best :3 |
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Trinity
Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 1482
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Posted: Thu Sep 27, 2007 6:58 pm Post subject: |
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thanks everyone! |
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Silversketches
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Posted: Fri Sep 28, 2007 1:38 pm Post subject: |
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I LOVE the first one.
I love the rain also, so I guess I liked it even before I read it.
XD
But all of them are amazing...
great vocabulary. |
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Trinity
Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 1482
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Posted: Fri Sep 28, 2007 7:29 pm Post subject: |
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thanks! |
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