The Story-A story by Heather- Chapter 1-12 (mystery-fantasy)

Lil*Angel · Joined: 03 Dec 2006 Posts: 484

oO...sweet...good tension...finish?

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

Heather do you like to tourture me?Lol I want no scratch that I need to know whats gonna happen next..

Lil*Angel · Joined: 03 Dec 2006 Posts: 484

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

I know!

Heather · Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 5915

lol Just finishing up the last part of the chapter. Either tonight or tomorrow night!! Very Happy

Lil*Angel · Joined: 03 Dec 2006 Posts: 484

mmkay...and get to it Heather! We're waiting! =P

Heather · Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 5915

By demand lol!
Left off with:
I expected a crash when we were about to hit the building but...

Chapter 6:

But... we went right through the wall! Toad laughed at the face I made. I sat up straight. "What did you think? I'd let us die?" I shook my head as he parked the car. We both got out. We went into a room. Toad shut the door. There were two doors, the one we wnet through, that shut immediatly as we entered, and a door on the other side of the room. The only object in the room was a table. The table was surrounded by men. Only three of them at the table, standing up. One guy was short, just able to see above the table.He was in a green suit. Another guy was medium hieght. He had around hair and a rough voice over the others. The oldest one had grey hair. He had a long beard. He was the tallest and had a less rough voice then the other guy. He turned to us. He pointed at me. "YOU! GET OVER HERE!" I ran over. Toad tried to stop me. The guy opened the door. It was black inside. "YOU DIRTY ROTTEN....." He pushed me in. Toad screamed. All I saw was Toad talking to the guy. Then, it was dark....

Heather · Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 5915

What do you think? Should I go on?

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

Duh!Lol!

Heather · Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 5915

Ok. I'll just finish up the last sentence and it'll be up tomorrow or today...

Heather · Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 5915

Here we go

Left off with:
Then, it was dark....

So here we go! Chapter 7:

I woke up. It was very white. I was in a bed. My head was killing me. Toad was talking to a girl in white and red. The three dudes from before were there. The old gray guy looked sorry. The short dude kicked a chair and walked away. The other dude went with him. The old guy said something to Toad and walked out. Toad walked over to me. "Sorry 'bout that." He said. "Professer thought you were the criminal." I instantly sat up. "CRIMINAL?!?!?" I screamed. Everyone looked at me. "She just had a horrible fall into door seven people. Let her... you know...." He said to everyone. The all murmured something and went back to doing whatever they were doing. Toad looked at me again. "Alright. I have some explaining today. Come with me. " I got up. It was a rainy day. We went out of the hospital like place. Toad shut the doors. Another door opened. It was dark outside and so was he. "RUN!" Toad screamed but I couldn't move. The man grabbed me...

Heather · Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 5915

I need someone to tell me whether to go on or not....

Marlee · Joined: 20 Mar 2009 Posts: 5592

Ypu were doing pretty good but no offence but I am starting to get a little bored - It it getting kind of confusing and all. I think you should start to rapp it up. Sorry I know this sounds REALLY rude But I love to edit

Heather · Joined: 28 Nov 2006 Posts: 5915

It's just that I still have to go through what happens with the characters and the crook. Like you don't even know what's going on and I can't just leave it as this because you don't even know what's going to happen with all of the characters.

miki911 · Joined: 18 Jul 2008 Posts: 147

OMG!!!!!!!! You should totally keep writing!!!!!!!!