A Story, I can't think of a title though

Marlee · Joined: 20 Mar 2009 Posts: 5592

I walked down the hall of our large house. I knocked on one of my brothers door. A muffled "Come in." was heard. I turned the handle of the wooden slab that separated Olan's room from the hall. I shuffled in and sat on his squishy bed.
"Whacha written?" I asked bouncing a little
"None of your bee's wax." He replied half heartedly.
"Olan Oliven Johnson, What are you doing." I questioned impatiently
"Homework, OK, go away." He answered, covering his paper.
I rolled my eyes. Brothers! I thought, The nerve of them! I shuffled to my room and jumped onto my bed and rolled over to looked at my sister.
"The nerve of Olan! He drives me crazy!" I exclaimed
"I know what you mean." She agreed, looking up from her knitting
I flopped onto my back and sighed.
"Mallina, how can you just sit there and let me suffer like this!?" I said shaking my head
She chuckled, "Easily."
I took PJ, my teddy bear and chucked him at her.
"My yarn! You have tangled my yarn!." She exclaimed, flabergasted.
I began rolling with laughter, "Only you would care about that."
She rolled her eyes and tossed PJ on the ground.
"Don't treat him like that." I ran to him and craddled him in my arms.

Whatcha think?

SomebodyDude · Joined: 15 Aug 2009 Posts: 4997

Maybe you should just call it Bee's-Wax

Marlee · Joined: 20 Mar 2009 Posts: 5592

No, that wouldn't fit, This is just part of it, do you think I should continue?

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

Oh wow go on!

Marlee · Joined: 20 Mar 2009 Posts: 5592

Oh thanx, I was writing this in an email, I love copy and paste Laughing

I shot a look at Mallina and kissed PJ on the head. I laid him softly on my bed, drapping a blanket over his fuzzy body, I patted him on the chest. For the past month, Mallina had gotten into a knitting frenzy, sweaters, hats, socks, you name it came out of scains of yarn.
"Are you making somethin' for PJ?" I asked curiously
"Of course, for his birthday." She laughed
His birthday was in three days.
"Can I see?" I questioned
"NO! It's a surprise for you to, silly!" She exclaimed
I crossed my arms in front of my chest.
"Come on, lets go pick on someone, like maybe Liam or Kyler?" I said getting up.
She rolled her eyes and set down her knitting.
"Let's go." She sighed, chuckling
I opened the door and trotted down the hall after her. She was standing at the end of the hall looking down the ajoining hallway. She motioned to me, so I jogged to her. Kyler was talking to our father, he didn't looked happy.

"But dad, Its the GAME! I CAN'T miss it!" He exclaimed loudly
"Kyler, you will miss it, it's the family reuinion." Dad explained calmly
Kyler stomped off in a huff and slammed his bedroom door.
I looked to my dad for an explanation.
"He has to miss the championship basketball game." Dad sighed.
"WHAT!" I yelled, I was a HUGE basketball fan, I loved to watch my brothers play for our school team.
"Yes Ireland, you have to miss it too." He rested a hand on my shoulder.
"But DAD!" I whinned
"This is the CHAMPIONSHIP!!!." I screamed
A crowed (sp) began to form and hushed whispers traveled through it.
My father was calm, he said,
"This may be the last time to see gramps and grammy this year."
"Can't they come to the game, you know how the love to watch Kyler play!" I complained

SomebodyDude · Joined: 15 Aug 2009 Posts: 4997

Ok well can you tell us what exactly goes on in the whole story or post the rest of it? That would make it easier to come up will a tital..

Marlee · Joined: 20 Mar 2009 Posts: 5592

Well really It's just a story of these peoples lives.

SomebodyDude · Joined: 15 Aug 2009 Posts: 4997

Yea I can tell that.

#1What do they do?
#2What happens?
#3What is the problem?

Marlee · Joined: 20 Mar 2009 Posts: 5592

Problem, Right now they are trying to figure out a way to get to the b-ball game.

What happens - If I say, nobody will want to read it.
What do they do - What do you mean?

SomebodyDude · Joined: 15 Aug 2009 Posts: 4997

Well I ment what do they do to solve the problem...

Could you post the rest of the story or PM it to me?

shaggydoggy · Joined: 30 Jun 2009 Posts: 15113

That's really good Marlee!

Marlee · Joined: 20 Mar 2009 Posts: 5592

Thanks I will have to write the rest tonight.

Marlee · Joined: 20 Mar 2009 Posts: 5592

"I don't know honey." Dad said
"Dad PLEASE!!!" Mr. Khandui had finally saidI could sit right behind the team, I had been waiting anxiously forr this game.
My mom came around,
"Eric, you know the family loves to watch Kyler play, we all do."
Obviously she had wanted to see the game to.
I put on my best sad puppy dog eyes and stuck out my lower lip,
"Pwease dad." I asked in a sugary voice.
Dad rolled his eyes,
"Fine, I will ASK." He sighed
A cheer went up from all my brothers. I threw my arms around my dad and kissed him. I gave my sister a high 10 and ran back to our room.
"So much for picking on Liam, we got to pick on dad, which is ALWAYS more fun." I said happily.

wolfgirl159357 · Joined: 07 Aug 2009 Posts: 19967

Awww go on i like it

Marlee · Joined: 20 Mar 2009 Posts: 5592

I patted PJ and sat on my bed.
"Mallina, You are ALWAYS knitting, take a break and ride Moon or play with Posie."
"I am croqueting, not knitting Ireland, can't you tell the difference?" She asked a bit irritated
"Nope." I answered playfully.
She threw her pillow at me and continued knitting...... or croqueting.
"Please come ride with me." I begged
"No! I want to finish my hat." She replied
I rolled my eyes and grabbed my cowboy hat and plunked it onto my head. I waved back to her and slammed the bedroom door behind me. I met Kyler in the hallway.
"Where ya goin'." He asked me, trotting after me.
"I am going to ride Amarxious." I told him as I bounded down the stairs.
"Can I come?" He questioned
I nodded my head. Kyler was 17 years old and had bright blonde hair. He had blue eyes and chisled features. He loved animals and life in general. We walked out into the fresh afternoon air that envoleped our noses as we ran out to the barn behind our house.

Tell me if you want more.