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New Poem Inside!! (Heather's Poems)
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Am I good at poetry?(When you do this poll, DO NOT think your hurting my feelings by picking one of the bad choices. I want your HONEST opinions!)
Yeah... your awesome!
14%
 14%  [ 2 ]
Sorta.....
57%
 57%  [ 8 ]
Not really
7%
 7%  [ 1 ]
NO WAY!
0%
 0%  [ 0 ]
Yeah, you are good!
21%
 21%  [ 3 ]
Total Votes : 14

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Heather



Joined: 28 Nov 2006
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PostPosted: Fri Feb 13, 2009 9:12 pm    Post subject: New Poem Inside!! (Heather's Poems) Reply with quote

Here is a poem I made up...... poetry is kinda my thing. I like people rating my poetry though. Please rate my poems(will be updated every couple of days) out of 10/10. Thank you SOOO much! This is one I haven't named yet. Please rate: once again THANKS!
Here it is:

I'm on an island all alone,

No boats or ships to bring me home.

I wish I had something to eat,

I'm not a vegetarian so maybe some meat.

Could someone come and save me please,

But no one can enter, no one but me.

I'm sad to say i'm stuck here alone,

Forever now and forever more.

Once again I really want people to rate it cause one of my back-up careers(or one that I want) is an author for poetry. Thank you! Wink


Last edited by Heather on Tue Sep 08, 2009 2:24 pm; edited 1 time in total
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Daisy Rabbit Mae



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PostPosted: Sun Feb 15, 2009 8:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

you are ok. It could be a little better but its good.
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Heather



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PostPosted: Tue Feb 17, 2009 9:07 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks..... Good is good! (well for me it is)
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Daisy Rabbit Mae



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PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 9:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

keep going you could be really amazing!
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Queso



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PostPosted: Sun Feb 22, 2009 9:29 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like it, I can feel the lonlieness coming through the words. The 3rd and 4th lines don't really seem to fit the feel of the rest of the poem to me though. Aside from that I love it Very Happy
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Heather



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PostPosted: Mon Mar 02, 2009 10:48 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

thanks.. for some reason when i make a poem i just can't help it if it doesn't rythm! I have no clue why
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Heather



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PostPosted: Mon Mar 02, 2009 11:03 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Next Poem-

Named Diamond (my dog)
Here we go!

ok i'll get back to you on that one...


This will be edited at a later date...


Last edited by Heather on Wed Mar 04, 2009 7:55 pm; edited 1 time in total
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Daisy Rabbit Mae



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PostPosted: Mon Mar 02, 2009 5:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Can't wait!!! Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy
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Heather



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PostPosted: Fri Mar 06, 2009 3:13 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ok... I'll get back on that one.
This is Donuts:

Do donuts get tired of sitting in their case?
Do they wish they could get up and pace?
Do they get tired of being munched?
Do they wish they weren't somebody's lunch?
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Daisy Rabbit Mae



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PostPosted: Fri Mar 06, 2009 5:36 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

that is soo good!!! I wish i had a donut. thats funny though!!! LOL or Lmao!!!
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Heather



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PostPosted: Sat Mar 07, 2009 3:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks
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Decoy



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PostPosted: Mon Apr 06, 2009 5:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I like these poems! Keep writing!!! There's always room for improvement, but it's still good!
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Heather



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PostPosted: Tue Apr 14, 2009 6:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks! Very Happy
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Heather



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PostPosted: Sun Jun 14, 2009 1:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I just got another in my head....

It's called Love is:

Love is the whisper in the wind that tells you everything is okay.
Love is the warmth of a fire with the heat on your face.
Love is that special person who holds you tight even when you did something wrong.
Love is unexplainable in every way.


And this is what came out of thinking of an away message lol...... I know its not that good.... I'm still trying to edit... If you have any ideas please put them here or message me.
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Heather



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PostPosted: Sun Jun 14, 2009 2:05 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

We were doing poetry in school..... again... so i have some poems


One is called Catcher(Inspired by Williams Carlos Williams)

So much depends upon
a catcher
behind home base
as the pitch comes in
while the bases
are loaded.


And the next doesn't have a name yet but is inspired by Edward Lear

There once was a girl whose folly
Made her go with her friend Molly
to go to a play
where the costumes were gray
And then she became melancholy.

That's it for now!
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