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Sterling
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 Posted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 6:01 pm Post subject: Cinquain ^^ |
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I'm uber bored, so I tried a new type of poem. It's called a Cinquain [pronounced 'sin'- 'cane']. Here's what I wrote, this took about 7mins:
Snowflake
Almost looking fake,
On their way down grey skies.
The smiles they bring do surprise.
Snowflake
I can write ONE for someone, if anyone's interested. Comments would be nice, constructive critism would be great.
Sterling
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~!pink-bubbles!~
Joined: 20 Jul 2008
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| Posted: Thu Aug 07, 2008 9:02 am Post subject: |
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I really like your cinquain Sterling but to make it even better you should try to extend the vocabulary in it. Thenit would be even better!!!  |
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Cecelia
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| Posted: Thu Aug 07, 2008 6:17 pm Post subject: |
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| ~!pink-bubbles!~ wrote: | | I really like your cinquain Sterling but to make it even better you should try to extend the vocabulary in it. Thenit would be even better!!! |
ditto! |
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ghgfgfgfhgf
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| Posted: Thu Dec 04, 2008 5:24 pm Post subject: |
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ummm kinda short  |
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Knight
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| Posted: Fri Dec 19, 2008 8:24 pm Post subject: |
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| ghgfgfgfhgf wrote: | | ummm kinda short |
cinquains are not supposed to be long. They are meant to have that exact # of lines. Sorry, not trying to sound like a know-it-all or anything bad if that's how it seems. Just tryin to give some info to a friend.
It was an ok poem...could be a lot better if u didn't just jot something down really quick...like some others said, better vocab use would make it a lot better sounding. One other thing...the last line should be a synonym for the 1st line, not the exact same word. Again, not trying to sound like a know-it-all, just trying to help. |
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Decoy
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| Posted: Mon Apr 06, 2009 5:53 pm Post subject: |
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| I liked that poem, and I would write more. |
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