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mash
Joined: 27 Feb 2007
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 Posted: Fri Feb 01, 2008 12:38 pm Post subject: Un titled |
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My grief still clutches my aching heart
I have grieved every minuit of our time apart
A bond so strong it will never die
With the question still burning inside me, why?
I think of you every second of every day
My love for you will not go away
I will say goodbye for now my friend
Until the day my life does end....... |
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milon
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| Posted: Fri Feb 01, 2008 5:23 pm Post subject: |
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Wonderful.
It's easy to read and flows nicely.
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Luckeh_Is_Random
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| Posted: Fri Feb 01, 2008 7:05 pm Post subject: |
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Nice. The fluency is excellent. Fluency plays an important role in a good piece of writing  |
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mash
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| Posted: Sat Feb 02, 2008 4:46 am Post subject: |
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 Oh my someone's commented on a piece of my poetry lol
Thanks guys glad you liked it  |
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Chilly Girl
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| Posted: Wed Oct 15, 2008 8:34 am Post subject: |
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| I rally like it. It's easy to read, and not boring at all. |
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mash
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| Posted: Wed Oct 15, 2008 1:38 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks everyone. I wrote this quite a few years ago. It's remebering my beloved Toby. (Horse) I miss him so much. I can't believe it's been 5 years.  |
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Cecelia
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| Posted: Wed Oct 15, 2008 3:42 pm Post subject: |
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| I really like it mash. sorry about Toby you can tell you love him |
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