Wolfeh story?

[Charlie1]

A group of figures darted throughout the bare trees, their movements lithe as they seemed to glide upon the blanket of white set on the soil. The group moved as one, in a rythmic beat, their mitts tickling the ground, footsteps barely audible. Their bods were lean yet well packed muscle was hidden beneath the protective winter coats they harnessed. The outlines of canines were apparent as the pack emerged from the lifeless forest they currently had been traveling through. Even though it seemed everything was in order, tensions were quite high, old wounds had emerged to sulk on the surface.


Keeping a respectable distance from the group was the pack's former alphess, petite yet full of spirit, well used to be anyhow. The femme's body was matted with dried blood, wounds and scars spread throughout her body. As she had become to be known, Stella held her cranium to the ground, letting her auds and nares lead the way. Her gait was more of a limping, rough and surely painful, her shame adding to it. Stella's grey & white pelt swayed in different directions, tampered with in the quarrel she'd unfortunately found herself in. But, that was all past her as of now, though she felt something replace the pride that used to fuel her, envy. The femme's golden orbs glanced ahead of her, locked upon the charcoal colored female who now held the postion as Alphess.

Leading the group was the Alpha, a considerably large-boned brute with an opaque coat splashed with tints of honey brown. As hard as he may have tried, he couldn't keep his mind focused, his thoughts drifting back torwards Stella, the real Alphess from his perspective, his Alphess. A low whine rumbled within Costello's throat at the thought of not being near Stella anymore. But, this was the circle of life and things happened for a reason, though that reason was unknown to him. Shifting his orbs torwards Bella, his voice cracked slightly as he spoke. Ehmm....c..ongr..ats on being the new ..a...a..lphes.s, you'll do ..an....ex.cell..ent job. To those whom had known Costello for quite a while, it would have been obvious he was fibbing, though thankfully Bella was relatively new to the pack....maybe....just maybe he could reverse this.

Please tell me what you think and don't be afraid to critique. This is just a little part, there's more.

[Charlie1]

Also please don't think it's boring or anything because or the words and such. I just really want comments. Thanks

[Lissie]

Um..It could be more interesting..but so far its great!

[Charlie1]

Yes, I know that. It shall get more interesting when I write the second part. This was just an introduction to it.

[Lissie]

Its great!

[Angelicious]

I like it!
It reminds of roleplaying, in a way. I <3 role playing.
However, I'd think the alpha would have the most say out of anyone in the pack as to who his alphess was. -shrug-

And the very name 'Bella' just brings up BAD memories from that book. -shudder-

Lissie - Thanks ^_^

[Lissie]

i edited it

[Charlie1]

Thanks Angel. Hmm I didn't really know that but it shall be taken into consideration. Bella, you mean from the Twilight series? I read all four of them. But I thought Breaking Dawn was just not SM.

[Angelicious]

Yes. From Twilight. -scathing hiss-
(I have a very long rant on that series, but it shan't be placed on here, due to not wanting to start an argument.) (Yes, shan't. =D) And I agree on the Breaking Dawn thing.

Regardless, when is the rest of your story coming up?

[Charlie1]

Ha true. -Realizes ish is off subject-

I guess I will start on it now and if not I'll post it tomorrow as it's not something really to focus on. I just wrote it sonce I was kind of bored. But I shall continue.