One day **Critique please**

[mash]

I love
Without knowing how
I hate
Not knowing from where
I grieve
Without knowing why
I smile
Not knowing that it makes someone else's day brighter
I laugh
And my spirit is lifted
I cry
Without knowing the reason
All in all....
I live...
Without knowing why or how.
The miracle is finding the strength to take that next breath
To continue living with this ever increasing pain
To struggle through, every second of every day, each the same as the last
The laughter only briefly making the day better
But...
I find myself hoping
That maybe one day...
One day something or someone will change this
And life will not be a chore
Maybe....
Just one day!

**Please any compliments or critisisms welcome, this is a all new line of writing for me and I'd like to know how I done**

[Ada Russel]

It was really good! You should send this in to American Idol's contest for songs. Whoever wins the song is sung by the two finalists! You just have to split it into verses and chorous and all that stuff! But it could be good!

[mash]

Thanks ada much appreciated

[Biba]

it's great, i loved it
samo tako nastavi

[summertimefarmer]

I loved it

[lorraine]

perty nifty all in all pretty well written and nice flow to the words