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Puppy Poem( warning, very long)
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Charlie1



Joined: 30 Nov 2006
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PostPosted: Sun Jan 06, 2008 9:08 pm    Post subject: Puppy Poem( warning, very long) Reply with quote

Your Dirt Rag

I am surrounded by
bunches of little
hands stroking
me.

Barks of
excitement
burst out of me
as I meet my new
family.

There's chew toys
galore
three meals
a day
excercise
my way
and a family
to love me
everyday.

Hey what's that?
Another chew toy perhaps?
I tug at the carpet
and am immediately
delighted.
But my owners
think differently.
Loud sounds
are directed at me
and physically
I am hurt.

"Out you go, bad puppy."
I'm pushed out
like a stray
like it's any ordinary
day.

I wander the streets
begging at
people's feets.
"No, get away!"
people say.

Hurt emotionally
and physically
I whimper in a corner
just like a mourner.

The next day
I wake up
surrounded by metal fencing
and begin sensing
this place is bad.

Day after day
I watch people
go by and by
withouut giving me
as much as a glance.

Then one day
I'm filled with hope
as a kid meets me
at the fence.

Stroking me gently
I lick his hand
could this be my home.
"Michael, get away from that dirty dog"
then the kid is gone
just like my family.

Tick, Tock
the clock keeps going
and my days are numbered.
"Poor little guy, his date is today."
I lift with excitement
and start to show the guy
affection in every way.

As the guy
takes me out of
my enclosure
bursts of energy
fill me up.

"I'm going home"
"I'm going home"
I think to myself.
But then
I'm lead into
a small room.

One guy looks at me
and turns away
and I wonder what's to
come this very day.

Another guy sets me down
on the table, which I lay.

I'm so scared I almost
pee myself
and watch as the guy
reaches for an item
on the shelf.

He takes out a needle
and it is then
I recognize my old family
out the window,
another puppy
in their arms.

I whimper and whine
and am filled with excitement
as the boy looks torwards me
but pretends he doesn't
recognize me.


The needle comes closer
and I'm minutes away
from not living
any day
anyway.

In one second it's done
I'm gone forever.
"Poor Guy"
the man whispers.

I am then placed in a bag
your little puppy
your dirt rag.

So what did you think, be honest please.
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Sterling



Joined: 14 Aug 2007
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 3:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Awww! It's so sad!! I love the ending..tis a faboulous poem!!
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Cowgirls Rule



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PostPosted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 7:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

aww...that is soo sad!
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fire22923



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PostPosted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 8:12 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

That's so sad. Sad
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Demitra



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PostPosted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 8:14 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

it makes me weep but i LOVE it!!!!!!! Very Happy
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milon



Joined: 12 Feb 2007
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 07, 2008 8:48 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

x.x

exactly what I needed to read.

It's fairly decently written, though some of your words should be on one line instead of breaking them up in several.. nah, nevermind. Ignore that xP

;.;
but-oh-so-sad.
ay-yi-yi.
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Cowgirls Rule



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PostPosted: Thu Jan 10, 2008 10:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

T.T
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cutepony



Joined: 05 Dec 2007
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 18, 2008 4:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

ow its so sad and brilliant and...and....ow soooo sad!!!
plz write another for me ur so good!
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Charlie1



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PostPosted: Mon Jan 21, 2008 9:01 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Oh, really? Thanks. Oh yeah Kat I forgot to change that since I was writing this late at night.
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Biba



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PostPosted: Tue Jul 01, 2008 6:00 am    Post subject: Re: Puppy Poem( warning, very long) Reply with quote

sad Sad
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Charlie1



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PostPosted: Sat Jul 05, 2008 5:01 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thankies everyone but after reading it I realised it does have quite a few errors which doesn't make it go so well. I guess a creator is never satisfied with his or her work. I guess I'll write another one, well try for that matter. Smile
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ghgfgfgfhgf



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PostPosted: Sun Dec 07, 2008 10:48 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

awww poor puppy Crying or Very sad Crying or Very sad

Last edited by ghgfgfgfhgf on Mon Jan 19, 2009 9:50 am; edited 1 time in total
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KaylaBlue



Joined: 13 Mar 2007
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 11, 2008 3:49 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm sitting here sobbing at my computer and people are looking at me go "what the heck's wrong with her". I point at this and try to explain, but, oh wait, there gone already...





WOW. Great Job.
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KaylaBlue



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PostPosted: Fri Feb 27, 2009 9:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

This still bring tears to my eyes.
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Drmchaser



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PostPosted: Sat Apr 04, 2009 8:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

There is something out there on the net that is very similar to this, but yes it is very sad and very well thought out.
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