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Cecelia
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2007 9:36 pm Post subject: |
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There is a lot of emotion in just a couple paragraphs! The wording could be a little better,but the meaning is very apparent and important for everyone to hear! |
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Cowgirls Rule
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2007 9:38 pm Post subject: |
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ok,Thanks!I will work on it. |
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Cowgirls Rule
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2007 9:40 pm Post subject: |
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I edited it.Here it is,this is not the full poem.
Why?
I stare into those pleading eyes, and think…why do you out of millions deserve this? I just hate to see an animal so innocent…suffering like this. I feel just hatred against these humans that do this, I will not let them do this to you and others, and I must stand up for what is right and what is wrong, and I will do something about this mess. I will try and stop this nonsense, this horrible practice. I must do and will do something to help you…
This practice must me stopped; these people must see what they have done to innocent animals. Why? Why take it out on animals? What have they done to you to deserve this? What drives you to this? This must end; there must be a point in time where all this nonsense must end, but for now…please, I’m begging you. Why have you done this to so many of them? Why? Why do you feel hatred against them? Do they really deserve this?
Do you aspect them to understand? They can’t speak and someone; sometime must take a stand for them. Do you aspect them to say,” Stop, your hurting us, we can’t survive,”? Then why bother doing this, if you know that it is hurting them? Are you really that ruthless? |
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Cecelia
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2007 9:50 pm Post subject: |
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I love the new part you added! Keep up the good work! |
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Cowgirls Rule
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2007 10:45 pm Post subject: |
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aww..Thanks! |
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Angelicious
Joined: 31 Mar 2007 Posts: 4801
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Posted: Sat Dec 08, 2007 11:53 pm Post subject: |
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Which form of animal abuse are you talking about? Just curious
(Sad, unnamed poem/song about this Christmas, without my Grandmother. Still being edited.)
This is the season to be jolly,
But someone's taken my joy away.
This is the season to be merry,
But I'm not happy, not today.
The lights are shining,
Bold and bright.
No one's by my side this year,
And nothing is alright.
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Cecelia
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Posted: Sun Dec 09, 2007 8:11 am Post subject: |
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Nice poem Angelicious! I think it is very sweet but I'm sorry about your Grandmother! |
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Cowgirls Rule
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Posted: Sun Dec 09, 2007 10:33 am Post subject: |
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I'm talking about well..any form of animal abuse. |
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Cecelia
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Posted: Tue Dec 11, 2007 3:02 pm Post subject: |
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Cowgirls Rule
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Posted: Thu Dec 13, 2007 9:50 pm Post subject: |
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I finished!!!!!
Why?
I stare into those pleading eyes,
and think…why do you out of millions
deserve this? I just hate to see an animal
so innocent…suffering like this. I feel just hatred
against these humans that do this, I will not let them
do this to you and others, and I must stand up for what
is right and what is wrong, and I will do something about
this mess. I will try and stop this nonsense, this horrible practice.
I must do and will do something to help you…
This practice must me stopped;
these people must see what they have
done to innocent animals.
Why? Why take it out on animals?
What have they done to you to deserve this?
What drives you to this? This
must end; there must be a point
in time where all this nonsense must end,
but for now…please, I’m begging you. Why have you
done this to so many of them? Why? Why do you feel
hatred against them? Do they really deserve this?
Do you aspect them
to understand?
They can’t speak
and someone; sometime
must take a stand for them.
Do you aspect them to say,
” Stop, your hurting us, we can’t survive,”?
Then why bother doing this, if you know that it is
hurting them? Are you really that ruthless?
Do you really care about choosing the “right” path for them?
Do you know how much it hurts to see them in this state?
Why then, why bother with even doing it?
What if you were that animal?
Think of that.
How would you feel?
Would you feel happy?
NO.
You need to stop and think,
I’m doing something wrong, I must
Stop this ruthless cruelty…I must
Stand up for what I think is wrong,
I must do the right thing for them.
And I will.
As we stand together pleading
Those humans that we feel hatred
Towards to stop this moment.
We’re bonded together by one thought…
THIS MUST END! Please end this
Horrible practice, we’re begging you.
Can’t you see a child, tugging on your
Sleeve with tears streaming down their face
Saying, “Please don’t do it to them, don’t let them suffer.” |
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nos1
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Posted: Sat Dec 15, 2007 7:44 am Post subject: |
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cecelia: did you get my poem or do you want me to post it here |
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Cecelia
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Posted: Sun Dec 16, 2007 3:45 pm Post subject: |
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Great poem Cowgirls!
nos1: can you please post it on here? |
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Cowgirls Rule
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Posted: Sun Dec 16, 2007 3:51 pm Post subject: |
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Thanks! |
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nos1
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Posted: Sun Dec 16, 2007 4:41 pm Post subject: |
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here ya go
If I close my eyes
I close my eyes,
We drift away,
Nothing exists, night nor day.
I know you but you’re never the same.
Why can I never hear your name?
Distant dream.
Yet I’ve known you so long,
I reach out to touch you but you’re gone.
Always too far away to see,
For me to know what you mean to me.
Please! Stay! Why must you always drift away?
I long to feel the warmth of your touch,
The gentle hands I’ve learnt to love so much,
But will you ever touch me so?
Because the features of your face I shall never know.
If I close my eyes we are together.
We float above the well known lands,
We’re hovering over the empty sands,
And for a single moment I can trace you.
Aware of every breath, everything you do.
I feel you, smell you:
Bitter sweet,
As your lips brush mine.
You tease me.
One last breath,
I hold you within,
And I feel the harsh sands beneath me like a drawing pin.
Real. Your gone.
Never leaving a date for your return,
But I cling on.
I search for your name.
I cannot let go
Of the shapeless form, I wish…
I’m sure that I should know. [/b] |
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Leopardstorm
Joined: 05 Jan 2007 Posts: 4326
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Posted: Sun Dec 16, 2007 5:22 pm Post subject: |
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My story is Faithful under Story time or whatever. |
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